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If you think the post below looks familiar, it's because I posted it three weeks ago, and then in a fit of self-doubt pulled it again. I don't know if I was more worried that people would hate it or that no one would comment (more likely, the second one). But I'm sucking it up today, because I really want your opinions and I need to learn to grow, right? :-D
I'm having a hard time wrapping my head around a querying issue. I'm in that place where I figure the problem must be with my writing/presentation, but at the same time I'm so close to it that I can't see what it is.
I've narrowed it down to:
My amazing and kind and brilliant and wonderful CP's have all helped me pore over this so many times I think they must be sick of it. So I'm asking for honest opinions (you have no idea how hard it is for me to ask for that. That's how desperate I am to make this work :-))
For all the things Ronnie doesn't know, the one thing she's certain of is sane people don't hear voices.
As an immortal servant of her god, Ronnie hunts demons. Or rather, she collects them from the inanimate objects they call home and holds onto them until further notice. Since she’s expected to serve without question, no one explained why she’s doing this, why no one else can, or why gods she’s never met want her dead but can’t seem to destroy her.
When the captured shadows start whispering things only she can hear, she can’t decide which is worse: that they chatter nonsensically, or that one wants her body for itself.
Then there’s the guy at the local diner whose aura makes her feel like she’s being flayed with a red-hot knife. Not to mention the sexy god whose presence seems to keep the voices quiet. Finding out the truth about both leads Ronnie to a discovery she never expected: she’s made from the recycled parts of an ancient god-killer, and one of the voices is a carry-over of the original.
Caught up in a divine plot, Ronnie must decide if her loyalties lie with a god doesn’t hesitate to destroy his servants on a whim, or one who believes every deception brings him a step closer to meeting his goals. Neither choice is appealing, leaving her searching for a third option. If she can’t figure out who to trust to help her get rid of the voices, she’ll spend the rest of eternity in a cell in the back of her head, watching herself destroy Elysium and Earth.
ELYSIUM’S CONSPIRACY is an 87,000 word fantasy with an urban-punk twist. It will appeal to readers who enjoy Neil Gaiman, Margaret Atwood, and Richelle Mead.
If you think the post below looks familiar, it's because I posted it three weeks ago, and then in a fit of self-doubt pulled it again. I don't know if I was more worried that people would hate it or that no one would comment (more likely, the second one). But I'm sucking it up today, because I really want your opinions and I need to learn to grow, right? :-D
I'm having a hard time wrapping my head around a querying issue. I'm in that place where I figure the problem must be with my writing/presentation, but at the same time I'm so close to it that I can't see what it is.
I've narrowed it down to:
- The query is confusing, and/or
- It doesn't show the aspects of the story that make it unique to the genre, and/or
- The story just isn't an interesting concept
My amazing and kind and brilliant and wonderful CP's have all helped me pore over this so many times I think they must be sick of it. So I'm asking for honest opinions (you have no idea how hard it is for me to ask for that. That's how desperate I am to make this work :-))
For all the things Ronnie doesn't know, the one thing she's certain of is sane people don't hear voices.
As an immortal servant of her god, Ronnie hunts demons. Or rather, she collects them from the inanimate objects they call home and holds onto them until further notice. Since she’s expected to serve without question, no one explained why she’s doing this, why no one else can, or why gods she’s never met want her dead but can’t seem to destroy her.
When the captured shadows start whispering things only she can hear, she can’t decide which is worse: that they chatter nonsensically, or that one wants her body for itself.
Then there’s the guy at the local diner whose aura makes her feel like she’s being flayed with a red-hot knife. Not to mention the sexy god whose presence seems to keep the voices quiet. Finding out the truth about both leads Ronnie to a discovery she never expected: she’s made from the recycled parts of an ancient god-killer, and one of the voices is a carry-over of the original.
Caught up in a divine plot, Ronnie must decide if her loyalties lie with a god doesn’t hesitate to destroy his servants on a whim, or one who believes every deception brings him a step closer to meeting his goals. Neither choice is appealing, leaving her searching for a third option. If she can’t figure out who to trust to help her get rid of the voices, she’ll spend the rest of eternity in a cell in the back of her head, watching herself destroy Elysium and Earth.
ELYSIUM’S CONSPIRACY is an 87,000 word fantasy with an urban-punk twist. It will appeal to readers who enjoy Neil Gaiman, Margaret Atwood, and Richelle Mead.
